Nice attempt, much better than the previous one. However, several minor (may be major) flaws, though unnecessary, hampered the quality of the movie.
1. Your disclaimer: very funny, ne movie lo pathralu levu, unadhi okade. Pradesalu kalpitham ento naku ardham kaledu. Simply, e theme ki disclaimer useless. 2. Title is too heavy and misleading. Love and career are independent. Love lo fail ayyi career lo success ayinantha matrana anitlo success ayinatu kadu.. love failure is an independent issue and got nothing to do with the career success. I got your point, love lo fail ayi career ni paduchesukoledu antavu, anthena? adi appudu failure ninchi success ki journey avadu! content wise OK, routine..! clarity ledu, nothing new and highly predictable.
2. "protagonist" baga cheyadaniki try chesadu. Nuvu kodiga a real time prompting la kakunda.. thanaki shot/scene cheppi natural ga vadilesu undalsindhi... thanu inka better ga perform chesevadu emo!? kavalante nuvu tharuvatha improvise chesi undalsindhi. chala sarlu ne prompting valla a abayi confuse ayadu,, expressions chala plastic ga vachayi. Plan chesukuni unte bavundethi..!
3. Technical flaws: window dark color blanket tho cover cheyalsindhi.. janalu night ani convince aye vallu! classifieds lo Job ad ento meeke theliyali !
Ne video ante authentic ga nuvu shoot chesindhi matrame undali.. effect kosame.. denikosame.. vere videos mix cheyakudathu.. originality pothundi.
shot length asalu reasonable ga ledu.. frame fixing zero. movie anadhi visual conversation, frame selection grammar lantidhi. grammar entha clear ga unte conversation antha easy ga ardham avuthundi.
By the way, upodghathalu vine .. chuse opika evariki levu,, undavu.. ne last message thisey, adi movie chusthe ardham avali.. nuvu malla animate chesi chepakarledu.. chepali anukunte ne movie waste.. direct ga chepochu.
1.disclaimer vishyanikosthe.. ee movielo kanipinche pathralu 1 e aina.. total ga unnavi..7 avi vinipisthai konni chotla vati presence telusthundi anthe..so it is.. 2.pradeshalu kalpitham anadi nenu korrekt chesi undalsindi. 3.i wont agree with the words 'title is too heavy and misleading' endukante..hero, love lo padi..career padu cheskunnadu.. last ki a love kuda dorakaledu.. oka pakka friends andaru settle aipothunte.. tanu chesina mistake (career padu cheskodam, responsibilities vadileyadam,atleast love lo gelavalekapodam) gurthochchi oka rakamyna frustration ki guri ayyadu..ikkada manam gamanainchalsindi enti ante..tanu fail aindi okka love lone kadu.. 3.inka real time prompting vishyanikosthe..ala cheyyaka tappaledu.. naku unna short time(4hrs) lo kavalsina out put kosam cheyyalsochchindhi.. appatiki 3 scenes tanake vadilesa..but work out kale..and 1thing is sure..tanu own ga chesinaa intha kante better ga untundi anukonu.. y bkoz adi tanaki life lo 1st time. 4.inka vere videos mix chesanu annav.. nenu byta video ninchi teesukundi okka sunrise time lapse video ne.. adi kuda endukante.. naku dorikina kamera tho sunrise video capture cheyadam kudaradu kabatti.. 5.i completely agree with u regarding Shot length, shot closing, frame fixing (it is due to shaking of kamera.. 6.upodghtahalu chuse vine opika evariki ledu ante nenu nammanu...(endukante.. cinema heros follow authunnavatini valla gorrellanti fans byta kuda follow avvadam manam daily chusthune unnam) ofcourse idi chusi andaru maripovali ani anatle.. but i hope they will think for some time after completion of movie..
P.S : cinemalu chusi, books chadivi, emotion to ugipoyevallani chusthe.. veellu intha weak minded aa ani naku anipisthintundi..kani okkati, manchi vishyanni ekkadaninchi aina teeskovachchu..
tooth brush ki boldu research work undi may be in summer.. 1s again thanks for ur analysis
where is double positive. icant understand your language that much, but i felt the essense of the story. in final print it is better to provide subtitles in english
Sri,nuv asalu mundey rajuki diagolues chepi practice cheyalisindira... Akada ne voice ekuva dominating ga vinipistunaira.Ne cinima ki ivalisina points emina untey kanaka mainly andulone tagipoyi undedira.Adi neku ardam ayinda? Edi varaku cinima kantey idi chala takuvaga undi,but concept matram chala bagundira.But,way of taking & all koncham dull ayindira...Sri koni angles scenes chala baga capture chesavra?
Sri Productions lo oly a S diamond shape lo red kolor asalu baledura... Asalu nuv adi main highlite cheyalisinadi kada e production tesaro a movie anedi... naku anipinchindi adi chepanura... If it hurts im sorry ra.
Sarle gani enty toothbrush movie a nxt? gud. All D Best WAITING FOR THAT MOVIE.
Nice attempt, much better than the previous one. However, several minor (may be major) flaws, though unnecessary, hampered the quality of the movie.
ReplyDelete1. Your disclaimer: very funny, ne movie lo pathralu levu, unadhi okade. Pradesalu kalpitham ento naku ardham kaledu. Simply, e theme ki disclaimer useless.
2. Title is too heavy and misleading. Love and career are independent. Love lo fail ayyi career lo success ayinantha matrana anitlo success ayinatu kadu.. love failure is an independent issue and got nothing to do with the career success. I got your point, love lo fail ayi career ni paduchesukoledu antavu, anthena? adi appudu failure ninchi success ki journey avadu! content wise OK, routine..! clarity ledu, nothing new and highly predictable.
2. "protagonist" baga cheyadaniki try chesadu. Nuvu kodiga a real time prompting la kakunda.. thanaki shot/scene cheppi natural ga vadilesu undalsindhi... thanu inka better ga perform chesevadu emo!? kavalante nuvu tharuvatha improvise chesi undalsindhi. chala sarlu ne prompting valla a abayi confuse ayadu,, expressions chala plastic ga vachayi. Plan chesukuni unte bavundethi..!
3. Technical flaws: window dark color blanket tho cover cheyalsindhi.. janalu night ani convince aye vallu!
classifieds lo Job ad ento meeke theliyali !
Ne video ante authentic ga nuvu shoot chesindhi matrame undali.. effect kosame.. denikosame.. vere videos mix cheyakudathu.. originality pothundi.
shot length asalu reasonable ga ledu.. frame fixing zero. movie anadhi visual conversation, frame selection grammar lantidhi. grammar entha clear ga unte conversation antha easy ga ardham avuthundi.
By the way, upodghathalu vine .. chuse opika evariki levu,, undavu.. ne last message thisey, adi movie chusthe ardham avali.. nuvu malla animate chesi chepakarledu.. chepali anukunte ne movie waste.. direct ga chepochu.
Dedication caption bavundhi.
eagerly waiting for your "Tooth brush".
Annaya.
im very greatful to ur priceless suggestions..
ReplyDelete1.disclaimer vishyanikosthe..
ee movielo kanipinche pathralu 1 e aina..
total ga unnavi..7 avi vinipisthai konni chotla vati presence telusthundi anthe..so it is..
2.pradeshalu kalpitham anadi nenu korrekt chesi undalsindi.
3.i wont agree with the words 'title is too heavy and misleading'
endukante..hero, love lo padi..career padu cheskunnadu..
last ki a love kuda dorakaledu..
oka pakka friends andaru settle aipothunte.. tanu chesina mistake (career padu cheskodam, responsibilities vadileyadam,atleast love lo gelavalekapodam) gurthochchi oka rakamyna frustration ki guri ayyadu..ikkada manam gamanainchalsindi enti ante..tanu fail aindi okka love lone kadu..
3.inka real time prompting vishyanikosthe..ala cheyyaka tappaledu.. naku unna short time(4hrs) lo kavalsina out put kosam cheyyalsochchindhi.. appatiki 3 scenes tanake vadilesa..but work out kale..and 1thing is sure..tanu own ga chesinaa intha kante better ga untundi anukonu.. y bkoz adi tanaki life lo 1st time.
4.inka vere videos mix chesanu annav.. nenu byta video ninchi teesukundi okka sunrise time lapse video ne.. adi kuda endukante.. naku dorikina kamera tho sunrise video capture cheyadam kudaradu kabatti..
5.i completely agree with u regarding Shot length, shot closing, frame fixing (it is due to shaking of kamera..
6.upodghtahalu chuse vine opika evariki ledu ante nenu nammanu...(endukante.. cinema heros follow authunnavatini valla gorrellanti fans byta kuda follow avvadam manam daily chusthune unnam) ofcourse idi chusi andaru maripovali ani anatle.. but i hope they will think for some time after completion of movie..
P.S : cinemalu chusi, books chadivi, emotion to ugipoyevallani chusthe.. veellu intha weak minded aa ani naku anipisthintundi..kani okkati, manchi vishyanni ekkadaninchi aina teeskovachchu..
tooth brush ki boldu research work undi may be in summer..
1s again thanks for ur analysis
--Author (srikrishna)
good attempt bro..
ReplyDeletewhere is double positive. icant understand your language that much, but i felt the essense of the story.
in final print it is better to provide subtitles in english
very poor quality..
ReplyDeletemost predictable but interesting and nice thought..
-- guess me..
Sri,nuv asalu mundey rajuki diagolues chepi practice cheyalisindira... Akada ne voice ekuva dominating ga vinipistunaira.Ne cinima ki ivalisina points emina untey kanaka mainly andulone tagipoyi undedira.Adi neku ardam ayinda? Edi varaku cinima kantey idi chala takuvaga undi,but concept matram chala bagundira.But,way of taking & all koncham dull ayindira...Sri koni angles scenes chala baga capture chesavra?
ReplyDeleteSri Productions lo oly a S diamond shape lo red kolor asalu baledura... Asalu nuv adi main highlite cheyalisinadi kada e production tesaro a movie anedi... naku anipinchindi adi chepanura... If it hurts im sorry ra.
Sarle gani enty toothbrush movie a nxt?
gud. All D Best
WAITING FOR THAT MOVIE.